Maravilla

Maravilla

Yo vivo en confusión constante,

Nunca sabiendo qué pasa o qué pasó.

Me maravillo por qué ella dice “estoy bien” cuando está muriendo,

Por qué él dice “te amo” cuando va a salirle mañana.

Me maravillo.

La gente dice muchas cosas, palabras, mentiras

Volando por el aire

Con la picadura de mil lenguas,

Abejas zumbando en las orejas tuyas.

Me maravillo si esas palabras alguna vez significaron algo,

O si justo fueron hablados para llenar espacio vació.

Me maravillo si piensas en mí

Cuando estás en solo y está silencioso.

Echo una mirada por el pasillo buscando la

Maravilla.

Pero tú has desaparecido

Como un fantasma en la noche,

Y me maravillo por adónde vas.

Me maravillo.

 

En esta poema yo quería escribir como la sombra de muchas personas, especialmente estudiantes en escuela secundaria. Pienso que es una cosa que todos sufrien a un tiempo o un otro. Muchos de mis amigos (y yo) han sufrido de mentiras y además la confusión que llega con la. Utilicé la metáfora de abejas en las orejas porque las nunca salir de tus pensamientos. También utilicé un hipérbole y metafora en la frase “con la picadura de mil lenguas”. Esta frase fue para representar el dolor que viene de las palabras la gente dice. Finalmente, yo repetía la palabra “Maravillo” y “Me maravillo” por énfasis al estado mental de confusión que la tema es para representar.

9 comentarios sobre “Maravilla

  1. Wow, this was so good. I feel like this poem can relate to lots of people of different ages and backgrounds, and I think that makes this very important. Also, I love how you used the word “maravilla” even though “marvel” isn’t that commonly used in English. It’s such a beautiful word and you used it so well. Amazing job Katie!

  2. Great job with this poem, I think it’s fantastic! I completely agree about how lies can create a lot of confusion; especially when you’ve put your trust in the person that’s lying to you. People may sometimes hide their true feelings and lie in order to avoid discomfort or hurting the feelings of others. However, it seems like hiding the truth hurts more than just saying the truth.

  3. This is really deep. I really like how you use some common phrases that are really lies. I don’t know how many times I’ve said “I’m OK” with it not really being true. Your poem really covered this idea, that many times we say things that aren’t really true, and this idea is confusing. Overall I could really relate to the overall theme of confusion in this poem and it was very nicely written.

  4. I am impressed. The imagery in this is really descriptive. I especially like the “con la picadura de mil lenguas.” This shows how powerful words can be. Overall, the mood of confusion make the poem strike a even deeper cord.

  5. This spoke to me, personally. I find myself pondering a lot of things late at night when I am trying to sleep. I think about what it is I’m doing, what I will do, what I want to do, and what’s been done to me. Your poem captured those thoughts perfectly. It described the feeling of helplessness and confusion when things go wrong in life. You did a wonderful job, Katie.

  6. This comment makes the reader question society saying that people chose to say they are happy and they are fine, when internally they are feeling the opposite. I feel to a certain degree that everyone can relate to the feeling of trying to blend in and appear happy to please others.

  7. BFF you impress me daily with your talent and way of wording phrases to make them speak to everyone. You once again used strong vocabulary that captured the readers interest, and then related to a high schooler’s life (while using a personal connection as well). I admire this piece very much, for it was raw, deep, and beautiful all in one. You covered the topic of confusion through young minds and how pain can stick with you forever, especially if it is spoken strongly. I also liked that you used metaphors and hyperbole’s to mimic how the truth hurts, but not as much as lies do; this added both a personal perspective while still using an artistic way of portraying it. This is very well written. I am both proud and impressed 🙂

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